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PROMISE IN GOLD

Sweat drips off my nose's end
and runs from bald head to my eyes.
I take a towel and wipe my gourd
then look up to the cloudless skies.

Then I lift another block
and lay it in its mortar bed
bend down to lift another one
decide to take a break instead.

My break chair awaits me in the shade
as well as cooler and cold drink
beneath a big water oak tree.
Damn! it's hot! I swear and think.

I sit and dig out a diet coke
in the shade where a cool breeze blows.
take a swallow, wipe my head again,
rub my knees where the ache grows.

There's six more weeks of summer left,
six more weeks of stifling southern heat.
I wonder how I'll last through it.
A few clouds now would be a treat.

As I cool off I look around.
This home will sit in privacy
along the edge of woods and old field
where deer leave tracks for all to see.

All the leaves are summer green
on the cherry, oaks and other trees.
My survey stops....then goes back
to something that sets my soul at ease.

A single ancient poplar tree
with a scattering of leaves turned gold
which shout that summer soon will end
and all the trees will become bold.

I scratch my bald head now turned dry
then smile at thoughts of coming fall,
slowly rise to get on back to work.
I need to finish up this wall.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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scribbler

9 years 11 months ago

hello

Good to see you back. I suspect that baby is taking up a lot of time lol. I appreciate your taking time to read and comment........stan

Sparrow

Sparrow

9 years 11 months ago

Stan

A story of a loving toil must be that house for your children.
Couple of small things:-
deer deer - One deer or a dear deer, probably just the one..

I need to finish up this wall. Quaint way of saying what you are doing or going to do but also a line to say madness of being up the wall when you are cross or angry, like:-
"You are driving me up the wall"
Otherwise good country drawl lol.
Take care young traveller good to walk with you a while.
Yours, Ian..

S

scribbler

9 years 11 months ago

what what

do do you you mean mean two two deer deer ? lol. I caught that and a few other typos before reading your comment but thanks anyway because I'm not always that observant. And yes, I'm soon going to begin foundation work on Dustin's house. As hot as it is I'll likely only work mornings though.........stan

lovedly

lovedly

9 years 11 months ago

u all are in great need of

a poetic police
who will not allow a word as an extra piece
so if you want to say piece twice
say it like this
piece and peace

then the police will not a ticket release
one needn't apply butter nor grease
ok second let it be Greece

S

scribbler

9 years 11 months ago

Lord No!

God forbid poetic police
checking to make sure that I'm vested
in some type of poetic lease
for I fear I'd be arrested..............lol............stan

lovedly

lovedly

9 years 11 months ago

u started it

but tell me why
u use caps all for titles
are you warning
if we don't read
you will not our poetry
read
nor let it on neo breed
okay agreed!

S

scribbler

9 years 11 months ago

No

particular reason. I just started out doing it that way and haven't seen any reason to change..........stan

S

scribbler

9 years 11 months ago

Wrong

I'm not presently on AC.......but I am in A(ir) C(onditioning) lol

S

scribbler

9 years 11 months ago

last election

set me free of that burden lol. I still offer my opinions to them now and then though lol.......stan