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For Lady Jayne

For Lady Jayne

Across the sea in wee Taree
a lady bard resides
her name is Jayne and soothing rain
her poetry provides

she writes of kings and needful things
of pleasure and concern
tales of old and fires bold
within her verses burn

beyond the pale of Fairy tale
her words are songs of sooth
she bares her soul to reach a goal
transcending paltry truth

through the years she’s faced all fears
and triumphed through her trials
battled pain and more again
yet still her beauty smiles

her will is strong and like her song
it comes from deep within
that special place behind her face
where Austral dreams begin

Serenity and sanity
shine brightly from her eyes
compelling us to end our fuss
and share her bright surprise

C. Lon R. Bruso

About This Poem

Last Few Words: My humble gift to a very talented Lady!

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, Bob Dylan

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Comments

Seren

Seren

9 years 11 months ago

Dearest Lonnie

I feel so privelaged you and Chrys have been so kind to me and I will always be your friends, I love the poem and will treasure it always ... hope you guys had a blast at Jess's Wedding

I am in shock a lovely shock

Love you both to bits, hope you know that

Lady Jayne of the Dreamtime ;)

L

Lonnie

9 years 11 months ago

Lady Jayne,

You are most welcome! I have been wanting to do a piece for you for some time now, and I finally got up the courage to attempt it! I'm so happy that it pleases you!

Sparrow

Sparrow

9 years 11 months ago

Lonnie

A wonderful piece for our Aussie Boudicca, this Bard fights a fight that would put many man to shame.
It is a lovely piece for her and I see it has already wet her eyes.
There are few in this world that I walk with always and our Jayne is one of them, we walk in times of laughter and of illness holding each other in times when needed.
Thank you again and take care young Lonnie, Yours as always, Ian..

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Lonnie

9 years 11 months ago

Thank you Ian,

Your comments and opinions are always most welcome, and I am glad you found this piece suitable for Jayne!

Sparrow

Sparrow

9 years 11 months ago

Lonnie

Our Jayne has adopted me as an extra Da, this is a privilege.
I have since Jayne arrived here on Neopoet supported her writes and many things that she has needed over the years.
Now a book of her works is on the press and available to those that would like a copy.
I have supported Jess and Jayne for years now and it has been a roller coaster of feelings, and as you know I send my unconditional love to all I meet.
I thank you again for the thoughts that are with the write, there is the true meaning behind the words,
Yours as always, Ian

alidzain

alidzain

9 years 11 months ago

Hello Ian

what is the title of the book? If possible I want to get it to support her in her journey and to get myself inspired with her art. I'm her fan and her friend.

Alid

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scribbler

9 years 11 months ago

Hi Lonnie

She already said she loves it and that's what matters most..........stan

lovedly

lovedly

9 years 6 months ago

I had never read you as yet

When I told Stan he was best in West
He said nope read Lonnie
so I came here as
a luny moony
Read your poetry
will read more of it

How is Judy
she is a good poetic lady