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Aug 04, 2015
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Old Shoes (August Contest)
There's many shoes in her closet
From her college years,
The four inch pumps she wore,
She holds up to the light
The pumps she met him in
When she found love, had her first child,
Then jumped the broom.
Now in her silver years,
These shoes she recollects.
Heels, flip flops, sneakers, sandals covers her closet floor
She puts them back in their place.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Rewriting my poetry while my brain is in training. How is my grammar?
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Barbara Writes
9 years 11 months ago
Off the top
I like this subject
Rula
9 years 11 months ago
hello Barbara
An awesome read. I love it.
With some proofreading this is a winner!!
Barbara Writes
9 years 11 months ago
Rula
Thanks. Glad you love it. It just maybe be winner for change lol
scribbler
9 years 11 months ago
Hi Hawaiian honey lol
I like the way you defined the stages of life by the type shoes worn. Where you have "lines" should be line I think. Good luck in contest..........stan
Barbara Writes
9 years 11 months ago
Stan
Thanks. I thought that "s" was wrong. Consider it fixed.
Sparrow
9 years 11 months ago
Barbara
A great write and so much in so few words this is the way some poetry should be.
Yours as always, Ian..
Barbara Writes
9 years 11 months ago
Ian
Thanks glad to hear that. I may get a win under my belt yet Lol