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Speak To The Heart Of A Dying Man

Speak to the heart
Of a dying man
Corroded by the words
Said in gradual
Discourse.

In a strange hour
He will be freed.
The flask of his thoughts
Stained
And emptied.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: Manila, PHL

Favorite Poets: R.S. Thomas, William Blake, Emily Dickinson, Dylan Thomas

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Comments

Dennis Go

Dennis Go

14 years 5 months ago

Thanks Longo

I'm glad you liked its "brutality"! Thanks for the wonderful comment!

Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

14 years 5 months ago

freed, empty, no more.

Oh that bottle stained,
the corrosion, browned, black,
the dying voice
the strange hour
freed, empty, no more.

I like this one Love Ann.

Dennis Go

Dennis Go

14 years 5 months ago

Thanks JayCee

Superlative? That's an overstatement. :)

It's really inspires me to see you great poets appreciate my work.