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Hiding emotions in metaphors

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BORG'S TALE (metaphor shop 2 assignment with 3rd assignment added)

I am number ninety three
named for my gestation vat
where I first came to be
and then was decanted stat!

A tube was then run down my nose
a direct route for all nutrients
to my stomach tasteless fluid flows.
I know no taste, I know no scent.

At two cycles they replaced one eye
with a telephoto infra red lens.
I guess it hurt, I didn't cry.
Emotions deemed the worst of sins.

Through the years I have gained many things
exoskeletons on legs and arms
a new ear which hears when photons sing
warning me of lasers' harms.

Sometimes our ship encounters "men".
They fight and scream when we arrive
then they contort and wail when
they realize they won't survive.

But we always let the young ones live
and turn them into more like us
half machines without love to give.
I've never understood the fuss.

Now we've dock with your colony ship
and taken casualties storming it
occasionally on blood and gore I slip.
I see my arm's taken a hit.

What is that I see in children's eyes
when, at last, they're stood in single file?
What is fear, hate, despair,surprise?
Resistance is futile.
................
But lately Something has occurred
I find that I might not be stone
for the last time we incurred
I came upon a girl alone.

I felt a ....something....in my chest
as she cried and loudly screamed
while I did what programing deemed best.
that night for the first time..I "dreamed".

My mind went to another place
where there never had been Borg like me
where even I could be embraced
where even I could just...be?

And other made me feel fulfilled
like a program was completed
and I did what My heart willed
and smiles and laughter were both greeted.

Doubts assail me like wasps and bees
in my waking moments now.
I wish to love if so I pleased.
But who is there to show me how???

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Geezer

Geezer

9 years 9 months ago

This is...

one of your best, in terms of pattern and cadence. I'm not sure of how well it did in the realm of metaphor, but I really liked the theme. A couple of little bobbles here and there, but all in all, a really nice work. ~ Gee

S

scribbler

9 years 9 months ago

Hi Gee

I tried to use. a borglike. inner. voice .while. writing. this...........maybe I should do so more often lol. Just posted this to keep a bit of activity going in the shop..........stan

wesley snow

wesley snow

9 years 9 months ago

It's a fun write.

Don't worry about the workshop. Rula and I are on it (mostly Rula... the girl is sharp).

S

scribbler

9 years 9 months ago

Meant

to be mostly for fun. And you better gird yourself for calling Rula a girl lol. She's an adult woman with children. PS any idea what's wrong with Chrys?

S

scribbler

9 years 9 months ago

I

Agree. Much better than being thought of as not the sharpest knife in the drawer lol.........stan

Sparrow

Sparrow

9 years 9 months ago

Stan

Great write I loved the Borg reminded me of the
"Star Trekies".
Those half man half machine were a super Darlek but they were modern lol.
I loved the series and this write is really great and shows their senses as they try to deal with other races.
Take care young traveller, and keep those feet here on Terra Firma,
Yours Ian..

As to the young Lady of the East, Rula is doing great as a moderator.

S

scribbler

9 years 9 months ago

yep

Those Borg were a truly horrible idea of the direction humanity could take if bio-implants start going too far. Beam me up lol...........stan

wesley snow

wesley snow

9 years 9 months ago

My suspicion is computer crisis.

She was having some problems before, but I honestly don't know what's wrong. We go on according to her plan with Rula leading and I will moderate. Look to the main thread for our latest assignment.

Rula

Rula

9 years 9 months ago

Hello Stan

I am not quite sure, but after giving this a couple of reads, I still see part two a mere continuation of the 1st assignment. May be I am wrong and I will be more than happy if you prove me wrong by pointing out where you have used metaphor as opposed to assignment 2 (writing without metaphor).
Saying so, I still like the rest, love what you've done here.

S

scribbler

9 years 9 months ago

Ok.

"I find that I may not be stone"
"Like a program that has been completed"
"Doubts assail me like wasps and bees"

Metaphors and similes I think...........stan

Rula

Rula

9 years 9 months ago

hello Stan

Of course those are metaphors and similes, not to be argued, but aren't used as opposed to assignment 2 which you have written about "High Tides". That was the main purpose of assignment 3

S

scribbler

9 years 9 months ago

oops!

Right assignment wrong poem. I'll get something posted later today.........stan