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All hallows Eve
All Hallows Eve
                    Waxing Gibbous moon is bright
                    on this cool October night
                    making shadows in the trees
                    with the help of autumn’s breeze
                    strolling down a country lane
                    passing harvests on the wane
                    pumpkins huddled in a field
                    wait their turn to be revealed
                    as some jack-O-lantern’s face
                    leering from it’s front porch space
                    beckoning the trick or treats
                    to come and get their yearly sweets
                    down the road a graveyard lies
                    resting ‘neath October skies
                    daring those who wander round
                    to walk its stone-embellished ground
                    perhaps to hear a whispered word
                    from some spirit there interred
                    or maybe just to feel the fear
                    of being there this time of year
                    witches may be flying low
                    spreading spells and causing woe
                    no one gets to see dawn’s light
                    without a shiver in the night
                    but rest assured, its all in fun
                    an Autumn treat for everyone
                    unless you anger vengeful dead
                    and make them seek your silly head
C. Lon R. Bruso
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Just my meager offering for the time of year!
Style/Type: Structured: Western
        Review Request Direction:
        What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
      
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Geezer
10 years ago
The title is...
a little trite, but apt. Your rhyme was excellent and the theme is one I love! Halloween is one of my favorite holidays. I could see this poem being used as the intro for an article in the local-paper on Halloween. It was smooth the whole way through! Nice job! ~ Gee
Lonnie
10 years ago
Thanks Gee
Glad you enjoyed the read and am happy you approve.
scribbler
10 years ago
Hi Lonnie
This does a great job in threading the needle between dark and fun. Just right for Halloween......stan
Lonnie
10 years ago
Thanks Stan
If it is approved by the master of all things seasonal then I guess its okay!
Esker
10 years ago
good..no greatly written!
enjoyed this smooth and jolly write about Halloween Lonnie!
thank U!
Lonnie
10 years ago
Thanks Stephen,
always good to hear fom you and get your take on something I have written.
Seren
10 years ago
Halloween
Its getting bigger and bigger here every year in Australia but its always held a special place in my heart as it is my fathers birthday.
As always rhythm and rhyme divine and its such a pleasure to read my favourites again ... I cant always comment but I am around every few days for hours or minutes however it can be draining
I've been in hospital and I have dialysis and hopefully I can get well enough for a transplant but atm I'm not well enough even if a kidney.or two became available
So sorry I have been quiet on FB but I simply don't have the energy to keep up a conversation for very long I tried to keep up once and that had to be it I will return if and when things improve but right now I'm concentrating on getting as well as I can.
I miss you all quite much but I sleep lots and lots and that for me is a different experience after a lifetime of insomnia
Much love to you both Jayne xox <3
Lonnie
10 years ago
Thank you Jayne,
For taking time to read and reply to this. I send prayers and good wishes you way for a speedy recovery!
ThEdges
9 years 10 months ago
Hi Lonnie--
I just got great praise of your work from weirdelf, and came here to read one of your poems, and I was not disappointed! He said we had similar style and I clearly see that here. Thanks for sharing!
Best always,
Laura
raj
9 years 10 months ago
Lonnie is one of those I
Lonnie is one of those I admire here on Neopoet for the honesty with which he writes and the crispness of his verses. It's good Laura that you two have got connected here as fellow poets.
Regards,