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Rula
Rula
Sep 23, 2015 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the workshop:

Hiding emotions in metaphors

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When Fire Flares (Metaphor Workshop) #3

She sat there
waiting for warmth
to conquer the place;

a rampaging dragon
blew to inflame the space,

the fervent
shackled demons
rage with glaring blaze
then nothing works
to let them free

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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wesley snow

wesley snow

9 years 9 months ago

This is the opening of an epic poem.

Rule number one: we open "medias res" (in the middle of things) and our heroine is at her lowest ebb. In the greatest of danger.
This was fun for all it didn't say.

Rula

Rula

9 years 9 months ago

thank you sir

I had to find out what "midas res" is.
Thanks for the encouraging comment.

alidzain

alidzain

9 years 9 months ago

Salam Rula

such great skill. I wished I could write just as good.

Alid

Sparrow

Sparrow

9 years 9 months ago

Rula

A great part three to the Met's I have completed mine and unusual as it seems I am waiting for the others LOL.
Good piece here Rula, my Dragon is smiling away in the recesses of my mind he warms my soul as only he can.
Take care and look after you out there,
Yours as always,Ian

Rula

Rula

9 years 9 months ago

thank you Ian

I am happy to give you a smile.
Thank you!!

Sparrow

Sparrow

9 years 9 months ago

Rula

Can we have your lovely dragon Rampaging around as
a ramping dragon seems strange, still loved it,
Yours Ian..
PS:- My 3rd entry is at the beginning of my 2nd so that the two can be compared..x

Rula

Rula

9 years 9 months ago

thank you Ian for

The second look and your thoughts are always valued. I've looked up the two woords but seems that the difference is slight to the non native like myself. Therefore I had to go with your suggestion with many thanks.

S

scribbler

9 years 9 months ago

Hmmm.......

I read this and found 2 places where I'd have used a different word. Then I considered that changing those words would do only that and not really improve anything. Why did I just bore you with my thought process? To prove that I Did give this short poem its proper consideration ............stan

Rula

Rula

9 years 9 months ago

thank you Stan

Always appreciate your visit and any suggestions if not used in the moment shall be considered at the sooner future.