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judyanne
judyanne
Nov 08, 2015 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the workshop:

Storytelling in Verse (sempiternal): The Ballade

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Out of this world (Ballade WS)

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All gather 'round, I have a tale
(you may, 'though, find it hard to trust)
the sort to make the strongest pale.
I swear, declare it happened thus.
You'll think I need a therapist,
and 'though so many won't believe
and call it simply bovine dust,
I don't set out to try deceive.

One night, whilst watching heaven's veil
a new world view was, on me, thrust.
And even if 'you lie,' you wail,
I swear, declare it happened thus.
It caused me such surprise, I cussed -
a flashing light I could perceive
illuminate a flying bus.
I don't set out to try deceive.

It landed causing quite a gale.
(With fear I froze, I had to just
remind myself to breath, inhale).
I swear, declare it happened thus.
Emotions, reason in a fuss
my whole reality unweaved.
My thoughts, surrounds, became all mussed.
I don't set out to try deceive.

Once told the rest you'll be nonplussed,
(I don't set out to try deceive).
and what occurred, believe you must,
I don't set out to try deceive.
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About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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judyanne

judyanne

9 years 7 months ago

thank you emeka

I'm very glad that you liked this

And I'm very glad that you wanted more ... that was the intent :)
(for workshop purposes, it is supposed to be not finished..... we're pretending to be medieval wandering minstrels looking for an audience to listen to the story down at the inn later,...and hopefully they'll enjoy it and buy us an ale and cheese, if not a good hot meal lol)

Love judy
xxx

judyanne

judyanne

9 years 7 months ago

hi Rula

Thanks hon - your comment is greatly appreciated
I find these fun.... how about you?
love judy
xxx

alidzain

alidzain

9 years 7 months ago

Judy

effortless for you, not for me. I can try but I think this form is beyond me..

Alid

alidzain

alidzain

9 years 7 months ago

Judy

I can only try but I do have my doubts just like I have with the sonnet. I'm telling myself '' Know your limits then try your best to defy it'' Even if I don't succeed, at least I don't completely give up.

Alid

wesley snow

wesley snow

9 years 7 months ago

WHY IS THIS THE FIRST TIME I'VE SEEN THIS?

Where the hell did it come from? How did I miss it?
It's a kick in the head. A rollicking good time. You'll have to come up with more for tomorrow night. They'll want a week of this shit at least... if not more. I hope you have a lot of it up your sleeve. I bet you do.
I'll be there tomorrow night.

judyanne

judyanne

9 years 7 months ago

lol

Thank you Wes
it was only written after your 'challenge' on the WS - so you didn't 'miss' it - i only submitted it the other day....

So does that mean you'll buy me a hot meal at the inn?

love judy
xxx

wesley snow

wesley snow

9 years 7 months ago

Nightly for a week.

But every night has to be different.
It was a hard life, but then they take the new stuff to the next village and try it out.
Sounds like a stand up comic.

judyanne

judyanne

9 years 7 months ago

lol

Hi Raj
thanks
love judy
xxx

alidzain

alidzain

9 years 7 months ago

Hi All

I've answered Wes's challenge. My new ballade is entitled ''Mobster''.Not sure if it's good enough but at least I've tried.

Alid