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Singing the ennui away.
Trundle up the hill in grief,
then thunder down,hot tears in rain
Wedge your nose into a rose,
as if to learn to sniff again
Find your feet, raise up and plod
on the self same, old beaten track
Peer in lost curiosity at shops, once known,
interiors now, are starkly black
Realize, you've done all this before
and wonder also, too
Why all the horror of the world
has been lost on some, but loosed on you
But know: this is just the ennui talking
that late afternoon palliative rose
That covets all our shouldered burdens
convinces us we're carved morose
When will all this vicious circling,
totem of the life we call absurd
Be broken and the heart thrown open -
hearing songs, as yet unheard?
About This Poem
Last Few Words: France, notre cœur est avec vous.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
wesley snow
9 years 7 months ago
My kind of poetry.
Loose, but obvious structure. Almost a western structured free verse.
I liked it very much.
vandiemenspeak
9 years 7 months ago
Thanks Wes, and love the quote...
Ever since the Guardian (UK) misprinted "can't" with hilarious, if unfortunate consequences, I read that paper very carefully.
Take care.
Chris.
scribbler
9 years 7 months ago
Hello!
I suspect you are already aware that line 7 needs a bit of trimming. Maybe :peer through shop glazes once familiar? Enjoyed the read nonetheless........stan
vandiemenspeak
9 years 7 months ago
Thanks Stan,
Well spotted, was just testing you ;) - line is thus tweaked, and another minor change. busy time of the year, haven't been around much, hope all is well.
Cheers.
Chris.