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Harmattan Poems I-V
I
Everything is in
a state of gradual decline:
our conversations
taper off the anticline
and dwindle into silence.
II
With time the music
will get on your bloody nerves:
your lips will bleed and
kisses taste like rusted nails;
speech will be spare and thirsty
III
We've spent our old days
swiping through false memories
by frigid windows
wet with tears, or sometimes rain;
should we go outside to dry?
IV
A chorus of dead
leaves rises with each footfall;
haze disperses in
all directions, as if from
some lone dementor fleeing
V
Sand between my toes;
Coconuts like shriveled tits
Clap against the breeze.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: A series of poems written about the Harmattan season.
Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
wesley snow
9 years 6 months ago
It's quite beautiful.
It is filled with so many metaphors that you could call it that. The language use is spectacular.