angelic love

When two angels love

Gentle soft and smooth,
as roses petals
one would wish
were placed in ones basket of love daily
by friends equally lovely

I am that fish
with a mermaids stance
face is worthy of many a glance

My mane like a horse's
and my figure stout
on horseback with a hat on
when I am out

Then as I swim
like a mermaid too
without a bikini
wonder how.... would you
Life is a melody of much hue
when someone is in love
with someone anew

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

Comments

Sparrow

9 years 7 months ago

Loved

Saw a girl in a pub once and her hair was a beaut red colour and she had the face of an Angel, so I was forced to write a short piece for her:-

A Feeling
If a mermaid were to break the surface of the sea
Regain her legs and walk with me
I would think of you..

Your piece could be a lot more descriptive, or is it the feelings that you have missed out, not sure it pulled then juddered, maybe a few small changes..
Take care young Bard,
Yours Ian..

lovedly

9 years 7 months ago

yeah a gal wanted it

you know what
smart man Ian