Buddha

Dec 24, 2015 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Anticipation

Secretly
I lay
A pink Hibiscus
In my lovers bath
My heart races
With delightful
Anticipation

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This poem actually is a true snapshot of my wedding night, my wife was undressing and I poured her a bubble bath. The hibiscus and bubble bath I had pre planned... It worked as planned

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Diego, California U.S.A., USA

Favorite Poets: Shakespear, Silverstien

Comments

Sparrow

9 years 6 months ago

Bud

Seems like romance is still alive in remote corners of the globe, a good small write Welcome to out site and I hope to see many more writes and your interaction with many of us, Yours Ian.T

Buddha

9 years 6 months ago

Thank you Bud for your

Thank you Bud for your critique, I look forward to writing more and learning more form reading other poets work. Thank you so much. Buddha...

Barbara Writes

9 years 6 months ago

Nice

Love the whimsical way you wrote this lovely Imitate piece

Buddha

9 years 6 months ago

Thank you so very much

Thank you so very much Barbara for your critique. I love to write Haiku and will start again soon. Buddha...

Barbara Writes

9 years 5 months ago

Great

Stop by my workshop collaborative poetry writing (renga) anytime and share your haiku.

lovedly

9 years 6 months ago

for a moment I thought

Buddha had returned
as if he were still unmarried
trying to make amends
to his lovely wife

Buddha

9 years 6 months ago

I loved your critique Lovedly

I loved your critique Lovedly, My wife inspires everything I do including writing poetry. Buddha

lovedly

9 years 6 months ago

great

hope u will stay

alidzain

9 years 6 months ago

Bro

Good one. Keep on writing!

Alid

Joan Rolls

9 years 5 months ago

I wish more husbands would

I wish more husbands would pen emotions. Lovely

Buddha

9 years 5 months ago

Thank you for your comment. I

Thank you for your comment. I really appreciate your response. Some men have trouble with emotions, I grew up with a father who did not encourage or tollerate emotions from anyone in the family. My wife helped me through that and I am still learning.