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Feb 23, 2016
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Three for just one
Out in the clouds
rolling wet
she still wonders yet
She awaits his decision
now or later
whenever
In that moment
of chaos
he wondered
where to kiss first
But what can you say
about a man
in the desert
What comes
nearest first
thrust!
or
thirst...
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Sparrow
9 years 4 months ago
Loved
A mix here, being in the wet and the desert at the same time, and not knowing ones own state, rest springs to mind then there will be plenty of time for other things,
This needs some filling in there are gaps, more story please,
Yours Ian..
lovedly
9 years 4 months ago
even in the dry desert
women feel the orgasm