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Esker
Esker
Feb 28, 2016 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

In Trusion..........

we drive our trucks
slip our arms
our fingers
arms inside
your robes
we are
the intrusion

looking for
the numerical
impossible

...

thank U

let us settle in the
garden of dust

..

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: north ontario, CAN

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Sparrow

Sparrow

9 years 4 months ago

Steve

I like the simplicity of this one, is there a problem with the flow of these lines:-
slip our arms
our fingers
arms inside..
Take care and look after you,
I would like you to reconsider putting a piece forward for the Neopoet book,
without your write there will be a great space in there, Please, Please.
Yours as always, Ian

Seren

Seren

9 years 4 months ago

Smile

I read it enough times to form many different ideas on it .. enjoyed it as per the norm my friend

bravo !!

Always a pleasure to read your work there is no one quite like you

Love Jayne xxx

Esker

Esker

9 years 4 months ago

limited acess

might be awhile lbefoe I am on again! will miss U all!
mr wolf