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alidzain

Feb 29, 2016 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Inheritance

In the end
gold and silver will not last
but true knowledge
inherited by the living
will shine in glory
beyond this mortal life.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: singapore, SGP

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Sarojini Naidu and friends in Neopoet.

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Comments

9 years 4 months ago

wise words brother

I don't think you need the commas as it reads more as one continuous thought.
Just how I read it.

9 years 4 months ago

Salam, Rula

Thanks for the visit, read and comment.

Alid

9 years 4 months ago

How very,

How very true, nice piece. Regards Roscoe....

9 years 4 months ago

Thanks Roscoe

Its good to hear from you again.

Alid