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Geremia
Geremia
Mar 30, 2016 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

RITES OF PASSAGE edit

RITES OF PASSAGE

M y spirit wants to soar
with broken wings
and my body of stone
yearns to move again.
my days are black and grey,
colorless and faded rainbows;
cold rains that strike my soul.
there is no hope in my heart,
and I pray for annihilation.
but there is yet more to come
before it is done.

Richard for Joe

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lovedly

lovedly

9 years 3 months ago

I was wondering all my while

Where has had Joe gone
even Richards
did not say a word for so long
glad Joe is still going along

All our good wishes
we were feeling sad
but now we are glad
you have come back
Joe

Esker

Esker

9 years 3 months ago

The Journey!

last lines fit well with the paragraphs
above..
"pray for annihilation..but there is
yet more to come, before it
is done"

excellent passage!
I almost got hit by a car
the other day and I was
alert..
watching it coming
that incredulous
moment
where most freeze
I lept out of the way
the driver aghast
I waved like I do this
every day!
but it could come
and does to people
young old
indifferent
just like that..
but to see the journey
as such..
U my friend are a brave
one!
and to keep expressing
your path
is exemplary of your
dedication to the craft
of poetry!

thank U!
Mr Esker!

Keith Logan

Keith Logan

9 years 3 months ago

Darkness

Line after line of bleak outlook followed by a couplet promising more. This is dark indeed but it carries the subject well.