Roses without Thorns!

Show me a rose
Without a thorn
And a life without sin,
I shall lay myself bare,
Through thick and thin,
From without to within
And
Let you upon me sin,
But if i win
Your life will be mine,
For roses are like me
So ever loved and divine
And
You shall become a slave of mine.

Show me that rose
And
Accept my challenge
A rose without thorns
O what!!!

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: ROU

Comments

ziggy

14 years 5 months ago

hi there

well here I am as you asked
a rose by any other name hey
,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

loved

14 years 5 months ago

THANKS

thanks
a rose
is a rose
is a rose
i suppose

ziggy

14 years 5 months ago

hi again

" love is a rose
you better not pick it
only grows when it's
on the vine, a hand
full of thorns and you
know you've missed
it, you lose your love
when you say the word
mine ,,,,,,,,,,,,lyrics by ' Neil young
,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

Esker

14 years 5 months ago

this describes my relationship

here I with my love
was a slave
let me get your dinner from the store
hand over my cheques
walk you everywhere
bring you water from the fridge
wash your dirty clothes
just love me

but Im just a slave

love this poem
your writing style
has a dash and dare
and you have a certian
focus and vision
that dances

loved

14 years 5 months ago

I Salute You Sir

I Salute You Sir
For your kindness and appreciation
Upon a cracked vase in space
and
A broken lamp
can never replace,
The flowers or sunshine,
As you Sir
upon my face
So luxuriously place,
Such love and admiration
To share are born
a minuscule few,
Of which one are you
and
I wish you knew.