Who's Callin' Who Out

By brittle light, 24 April, 2016

say what?

I can't hear you

lil' dude, I don't read lips

come on, spit it out mealy mouth

wanna start raggin' on me?, do ya, huh?

you're about to piss me off, boy

blurt it out, or I swear...

"SHUT THE FUCK UP"

say what?!!!

Rula

9 years 2 months ago

Hello Al

This is fun. I loved the spontaneous language of this one until the f*** word. Well! I think you know me. But I have really enjoyed the read.
Thank you for sharing.

brittle light

9 years 2 months ago

thanks for checking this out.
I know I am late in responding, but sometimes I don't want a piece to keep popping up at the top of the list...so I wait till any other comments might show up so I can answer all at once...sometimes the wait is in vain! (LOL)

I know you are shy about some words...I'm not, but I don't believe in trigger warnings!

mand

9 years 2 months ago

Hi Al

I think I'll show my grandson this! He's sixteen, I think he will relate very well to the rhetoric. This is an honest write - I actually feel like this sometimes. Lol so I can relate to it as well.

Thanks for sharing :)

Love Mand xxx

brittle light

9 years 2 months ago

Hi, Mand

thanks for responding. I don't typically write in strict forms (as most poets here don't)...but this form is pretty open ...just line lengths, like nonets. I got the idea to try one from reading Rula's version.
I'm glad you could relate somewhat.

I felt the same after finishing this as I did with a nonet I wrote long ago....I tried, it was fun, yay!

thanks again,