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May 08, 2016
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My Only Published Poem (March Contest)
My friends wonder why
I don't often write
a poem about you;
"maybe she's not aware
of the Mother's day!"
"or maybe she doesn't care,"
they'd simply say.
They didn't know then
that you're the only
published poem I've
ever had
mother.
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Roscoe Lane
9 years 1 month ago
Very clever,
Very clever write. Love Roscoe...
Rula
9 years 1 month ago
Roscoe!
Thank you for the supporting words. Much appreciated.
lovedly
9 years 1 month ago
happy mothers day Rula
do read my BLOG message for u
Rula
9 years 1 month ago
Thank you Lovedly
for your kind wishes
lovedly
9 years 1 month ago
Is the P
in title purposely
Rula
9 years 1 month ago
Thank you
Hawk eye :)
lovedly
9 years 1 month ago
and they say
cataract I have
I said no ops please
let me go blind if so be it writ
LORD BYRON
returns in me
raj
9 years 1 month ago
Wow Rula!
Wow Rula!
the closing lines are so vivid and strong..."you are the only published poem I have ever had mother"..these lines keep ringing in my ears long after the read...
Rula
9 years 1 month ago
Dear Raj
À wow, coming from you, is absolutely highly appreciated.
Thank you!
raj
9 years 1 month ago
All because the poem deserved
All because the poem deserved a wow Rula. Pretty out of the box way of writing this one...
Regards,
Keith Logan
9 years 1 month ago
An excellent example
of free verse, something I wish I was better at. It is also brimming with love and pathos. It shows consummate skill the way you keep the winding up of the main point to very last word. Alone, the first and third verse make up a poem but the middle verse is a masterful inclusion.
Rula
9 years 1 month ago
Hello Keith
really appreciate your kind words. Been the first comment I'm getting today, I am not sure if anything will make my day better than your kind visit.
Thank you
Rula
6 years 3 months ago
Mark
You're so kind. I'm happy you like it.
Thank you.
scribbler
6 years 3 months ago
Hi Rula
A short sweet poem. Has your mother read it?
Rula
6 years 3 months ago
Never
Unfortunately Alzheimer left her with very little appreciation for anything...if at all.
V.much appreciate your kind visit Stan.