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May 10, 2016
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The Road/Man Way
Chomping through mountains
and buzz cut forests,
through avalanche prone passes and
straddled ravines.
Onward, it goes.
Slithering
slowly,
relentlessly.
Snaking its way
now, 'cross desert and plain.
Seeking only distance.
More and more distance.
...Its ever elusive prey.
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About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
jane210660
9 years 2 months ago
Very evocative. Jx
Very evocative. Jx
brittle light
9 years 2 months ago
thanks Jx
thanks Jx
mand
9 years 2 months ago
Hi Brittle Light
Clever - this is a monster consuming everything that get's in it's way, ignoring all dangers and ever hungry. I love the comparison - it's very effective and a reminder of mankind's ever consuming demands!
Thanks for sharing :)
Love Mand xxx
brittle light
9 years 2 months ago
Hi. Mand
thanks for your observations and reaction.
p.s. you can call me Al, if you choose!
'til next time,
mand
9 years 2 months ago
O.k Al
You're welcome and Thank you. :)
Geezer
9 years 2 months ago
What a...
sneaky snake! I can hear the hiss and slither of it from here! Nice work! Love the comparison to a serpent. ~ Geezer
brittle light
9 years 2 months ago
thanks for the feedback, Gee.
thanks for the feedback, Gee. I really appreciate you relaying your takes on a poem
They are always helpful.
catch you down the road,