Triolet - Love's Promise

She promised faithful love forever more,
a paramour with no regard to time
revived a heart once crushed and split in twain.
She promised faithful love forever more
to grow from strength to even greater gain,
what we then shared can’t ever be denied.
She promised faithful love forever more,
a paramour with no regard to time.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United Kingdom (Scotland), GBR

Favorite Poets: Robert Burns, Robert Lewis Stevenson, Kipling., I like things childish.

Comments

Rula

9 years 2 months ago

I like this

Mr. Logan. The sentiments show without being clichéd.
I also liked the 'more'/ 'paramour' eternal rhyme.
Thank you for sharing.

PS. I assume that your discard of the punctuation towards the end intentional?

Keith Logan

9 years 2 months ago

Nope

just sloppy cut and paste.

jane210660

9 years 2 months ago

See you're writing in

See you're writing in triolets again :-)
As Rula says, the sentiments show and it's not over blousey.
Jx

Keith Logan

9 years 1 month ago

A challenge

I just can't resist. As I always say, I can't stand sitting.

judyanne

9 years 1 month ago

nice triolet Keith

I have trouble with the meter of:
'what we then shared can’t ever be denied'
Does
'and what we shared can never be denied' say the same thing?

Is 'forevermore' one word?

Good to see you picking up a challenge :-)

Love judy
xxx

Keith Logan

9 years 1 month ago

Well

it is very nearly the same meaning and is very smooth. I'll think about it, which I never meant to do. It more or less wrote itself, as a simple throw away piece.