judyanne

May 19, 2016 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

the blemish

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I took a blood-red rose
and pressed it
between the pages of my heart
where it dried
paper thin
and brittle
leaving a black bruise
the colour of pain
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About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

Comments

jane210660

9 years 2 months ago

I'm getting boring, because

I'm getting boring, because all I keep saying is 'I like this' or 'I love this'.
So i'll try to say why I like this. To me the imagery is very bold. Also I like the fact it is in four stages, you took a rose, pressed it,it dried and you bruised, it's got a good sequence.
Jx

judyanne

9 years 2 months ago

lol

Be as boring as you like Jane... so long as you tell me you like my write I'm in seventh heaven
:-)
Thank you
love judy
xxx

brittle light

9 years 2 months ago

memories of pure hope and joy

Memories of pure hope and joy are the hardest to bear; when ultimately knowing of their crushing disappointment.
This piece has, and elicits, such a strong emotional feeling,
It doesn't seem right for me to call it 'clever'...but it is

judyanne

9 years 1 month ago

hi Al

Thanks so very much for the very positive comment.
I'm very glad you felt the emotion -
love judy
xxx

Roscoe Lane

9 years 1 month ago

Very,

Very succinct and smart, Love Roscoe...

judyanne

9 years 1 month ago

thanks Roscoe

For the visit and very kind comment
so nice to see you
love judy
xxx

Keith Logan

9 years 1 month ago

Very much enjoyed

especially the last two lines, which are as close to anything I could ever write in terms of abstract poetry.

judyanne

9 years 1 month ago

thanks Keith

for the supportive comment
I'm very glad to hear you enjoyed this
love judy
xxx

lovedly

9 years 1 month ago

you use a sharp knife to slice

at times,
then softly change your stance
and
apply butter with the same knife

a rose you crushed
sad
was it for pleasure
if so I must be mad
not to know how dry roses
in library books leave
black stains

your poetry is beyond
the realms of my minuscule mind
hope some day
I shall
in your mind's form
myself find..

judyanne

9 years 1 month ago

you are too kind loved

Thank you for the words of support
love judy
xxx

lovedly

9 years 1 month ago

I am seemingly applying a coat of butter aussie lady

Judy
so that you may help strike all waffle
out of me
okay for me

scribbler

9 years 1 month ago

Hi MM

Sometimes the best part of a poem is not what is said but what is implied or inferred. Such is the case in good poetry and such is the case in this poem.......stan

judyanne

9 years 1 month ago

hi Stan

Thank you for the very supportive comment
love judy
xxx

Esker

9 years 1 month ago

books...scraps....songs....laments...

Great poem!
Loved its imagery!
books....put that puppy in
there and jump on it..
I save everything
and from that
when I least expected
it comes back
Dreams...thoughts..
feelings..flashbacks
emotions....
half the time I forget
I put it all in there
but Im glad I did...
some things are painful
and not discarded but
set aside..pressed and
preserved for the one
day understanding
and re look
re examination
re feel