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Dragons Breath

Once upon a time a dragon wept;
fair maidens never seemed to understand
why elder set appointments went unkept
(his fervent wish, let sacrifice be banned).
The errant knights who wandered on strange quests
amused him with their pennant, shield and lance,
one hiccup as his hurried lunch digests
would have Sir hot-foot skip a comic dance.

No entertaining tin-can with a spear
could woo him from a woeful want of sleep
at length he sadly quit this sordid sphere
as villagers' vile stories cut too deep.

Then: heroes battled monsters to the death.
Now: faded fairy tales of dragons’ breath.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United Kingdom (Scotland), GBR

Favorite Poets: Robert Burns, Robert Lewis Stevenson, Kipling., I like things childish.

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Comments

judyanne

judyanne

9 years 1 month ago

are you allowed, or did you intend

to use the rhyme change in stanza 3?
or is this not intended to be a sonnet? Maybe not - is there a volta there?
I actually found it a little off-putting (the rhyme change that is, not the poem - I loved that) - but that's possibly ms rigid me lol

It would still work if you changed the order of the last two verses (lines)

Love the write
Gave me a smile
love judy
xxx

Keith Logan

Keith Logan

9 years 1 month ago

Cut and paste problems

caused that swap. It was unintentional and should really have been exactly as you pointed out. I must hire a proof reader.

Keith Logan

Keith Logan

9 years 1 month ago

Done

thank you for commenting, it is always appreciated.