To A Dear Friend

Thank you, my friend
for turning my frown,
upside down
and nurturing
the seeds of joy
in my heart
when I felt I'm lost
and torn apart.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: singapore, SGP

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Sarojini Naidu and friends in Neopoet.

Comments

mand

9 years 1 month ago

Hi Alid

Such a lovely tribute to a friend. :) There is so much to like about this poem, I really like the phrase "turning my frown upside down.." The poem is simple but effectively saying all that you want to say. I also really like the rhyming pattern - which enhances the flow very nicely.

All in all this is a really good poem - well done Alid.

Can't see any crits. :)

Love to you

Mand xx

alidzain

9 years 1 month ago

Mand

Thanks for the visit, the read and kind words. Glad you liked it.

Alid

Rula

9 years 1 month ago

dear Khalid

if you have only one friend who can get the frown upside down, you are then good. Don't let others break your heart. You have a big warm one. Always remember that.
You've penned here a little gem.
Take care Man!

alidzain

9 years 1 month ago

Salam, Rula

I'm lucky to have a good friend who still help me to be strong and a better man, indeed. Thanks for the Visit, the read and the comments.I'll tale your advice.

Alid

jane210660

9 years 1 month ago

This is beautiful, I wish I'd

This is beautiful, I wish I'd written it. Jx

alidzain

9 years 1 month ago

Hi Jane

Sometimes I feel the same way when I read others' poems too. My favourite is Serendipity's poems, raj's and Rula.Thanks for the visit, the read and comment.

Alid