Summertime Sadness

hope for hopeless dreamers taking a break
rain and inunduation
for the parched
keep writing
your voice is sound and solid

Firstly welcome to Neopoet and I hope your stay with us will be a great experience of learning and being with like minds.
Double spacing:- not sure how you managed that but mostly I write on word then copy and paste onto Neo..
You can try the part where you use the edit on your poem.
First copy and paste to a word document then edit the spacing,
Copy again then paste back on Neo..
Have a go anyway its fun, and you learn more about cuts and pasting at the same time..
In your poem you have said:-
I'm a blue spot on the sky
and the (planes) Maybe this plane should be Plains ..

"Summertime Sadness"

I'm a blue spot on the sky
and the plains

they drag the ocean's salt
a wet mattress
onto the panoramic sand.

It would be deafening
If everyone
spoke to me together.

but then again, how else
do clouds start to feel better..

There are many forms of poetry and later you will see how these fit in with your style of writing, Have a great journey with us, Yours Ian.T, Sparrow, or Yenti

Don't know enough about you and your work to give really good critique here. but I have a sense of what you are trying to say. I think you are saying just what you mean, when you say that you are a blue spot on the sky. Seems as though you see yourself as being hopeful in a sky of gray. I hope that is so. Write your poems on an Office Program and cut and paste to Neo. Then you can edit and write in whatever format you want. if you are not that savvy about how to use word programs and such, ask someone to help you. No shame in asking for help, only in knowing that you are ignorant and refusing to learn is. Good luck here and hope that I see more of your work here. ~ Geezer.

Welcome to the Neopoet! Its a good start and I know you'll get better as long as you continue to write and learn from the people here!

Alid

You'll find there are a few Aussies here.
This is a very cool poem. Elegantly sparse yet evocative language.
Looking forward to more of your work, please message me when you post new works, I'm unable to read every poem on the Stream.
Remember to give feedback to others.