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Faith

My faith was never a beacon of light
more of a flickering candle at night.
My Father’s beliefs were always strong
perhaps somehow I got it all wrong.
In spite of those hymns I love to sing
for me it’s more a borderline thing.

But I see things in a different way
I don’t spend time praying each day.
For me God’s love is practical too
shared with others in the things we do.
Through help we give to those in need
whoever they are, whatever their creed.

A man lies bleeding in the dark of night
prayer won’t save him and make him alright.
A helping hand will, so that’s what I’ll do
and he may feel God’s love there too.
Maybe I’m right or maybe I’m wrong
but this is how me and faith get along.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Country/Region: GBR

Favorite Poets: Rather than poets I tend to be influenced by songwriters and have a love of lyrics.

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jane210660

jane210660

8 years 10 months ago

Like this very much, besides

Like this very much, besides the message (which I suspect quite a few will identify with), it reads well.
Perhaps one tiny suggestion, imho first verse, fourth line, I would take 'all' out. I think it reads better without and isn't really needed for the meaning.
Just my opinion. Jx

Timbo

Timbo

8 years 10 months ago

thanks

Thanks Jane for the feedback, Tim

Timbo

Timbo

8 years 10 months ago

ALID

Alid, thank you, Tim

Timbo

Timbo

8 years 10 months ago

thanks

Thank you Mark, Tim

V

Vivovon

8 years 10 months ago

A good point

A very pleasant presentation. Read smooth and clear. Spiritual, mystic, ritual or pragmatic conditions may be regulated by God gene(s) as hypothesized by Dean Hamer. If interested, you take a look at it at https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/God_gene.

Timbo

Timbo

8 years 10 months ago

thank you

Thank you for commenting Vivovon.

Tim