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Sep 09, 2016
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new what! love
A new kind of love
A new born child
is like this
doesn't know
a world does exist,
in any case
what a world is 'tis
not known
'tis bliss
she winks and wakes
and then has a shake
asks for milk
she awakes
O miss
the mist of darkness
has been wiped away
the sunrises
like each and every day
and
the galaxy and moon go away
then it’s only my life and yours
all say
come love me now
the light is around
from darkness and deep slumber
we have woken
enlightenment ensues
for me and you
Behold!
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Vivovon
8 years 10 months ago
I see it
Well. You have made it simple. Yes, I see it. It reads very good. A deep insight, I would say.
lovedly
8 years 10 months ago
glad i have found
an encouraging reader in you I also read you.
You are a younger one too
Sparrow
8 years 10 months ago
Loved
A great read and a good one from your quill.
It is good to read something of yours that is not a comment on another work, and arriving as a new born does my eyes good,
Yours Ian..
lovedly
8 years 10 months ago
friend Ian
when I compose serious poetry
do you know
i have a mirror with me
and i see
be not surprised
Ian standing in front of me
I am behind his shadow
then I compose
like this one i did
found from my archives
You had met me even then
Ian
where is friend Stan
lovedly
8 years 10 months ago
thanx remark
If I could have written it, I might not have got some practice in meter ;
hope I am not unsound
if no meter remark you have found !