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new what! love

A new kind of love

A new born child
is like this
doesn't know
a world does exist,
in any case
what a world is 'tis
not known
'tis bliss

she winks and wakes
and then has a shake
asks for milk
she awakes
O miss

the mist of darkness
has been wiped away
the sunrises
like each and every day
and
the galaxy and moon go away
then it’s only my life and yours
all say

come love me now
the light is around
from darkness and deep slumber
we have woken
enlightenment ensues
for me and you

Behold!

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

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Vivovon

8 years 10 months ago

I see it

Well. You have made it simple. Yes, I see it. It reads very good. A deep insight, I would say.

Sparrow

Sparrow

8 years 10 months ago

Loved

A great read and a good one from your quill.
It is good to read something of yours that is not a comment on another work, and arriving as a new born does my eyes good,
Yours Ian..

lovedly

lovedly

8 years 10 months ago

friend Ian

when I compose serious poetry
do you know

i have a mirror with me
and i see

be not surprised
Ian standing in front of me
I am behind his shadow
then I compose
like this one i did
found from my archives

You had met me even then
Ian
where is friend Stan

lovedly

lovedly

8 years 10 months ago

thanx remark

If I could have written it, I might not have got some practice in meter ;
hope I am not unsound
if no meter remark you have found !