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Oct 04, 2016
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Susan
Under an orange moon
everything
is perfect
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Candlewitch
8 years 9 months ago
hello,
Susan must be someone very special to you, to dedicate such lovely thoughts to her! wonderful imagery here!
always, Cat
brittle light
8 years 9 months ago
cool
cool
pleasant sentiment
(but hardly true)
love/infatuation can do this to an otherwise sane man
I like the immediacy and looseness of your approach to Haiku
hope there are more to come
respectfully,
jane210660
8 years 9 months ago
We need more orange moons. Jx
We need more orange moons. Jx
valene
8 years 9 months ago
Lovely image
Your sentiment comes through ever so clearly! I hope Susan appreciates this tribute to her! It's proof it only takes a few words to express ones feelings for for another!
val
Guy Jenkins
8 years 9 months ago
One in all, all in one, if
One in all, all in one, if only this is realised, no worries
About. not being perfect
guy
valene
8 years 9 months ago
perfect or not perfect
if everything were perfect there'd be no reason to strive for perfection; and yes maybe trite but true.... not to mention the fact that life would be boring as hell if all were perfect!
val