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Fair Maid

Eyes deep and radiant
within the fairest face;
a figure lithe and lean.
Each curve and gradient
exudes melodic grace,
through sweater and old jeans.

Though temperatures rise
and pulse beats start to pound,
in bust of perfect size
a loving heart is bound.

More fair than meets the eye;
look deep, for looks belie.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United Kingdom (Scotland), GBR

Favorite Poets: Robert Burns, Robert Lewis Stevenson, Kipling., I like things childish.

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chevyvent

chevyvent

8 years 7 months ago

Excellent writing

Very nice flow with piece excellent writing I'm now a fan of yours.
Your friend,
Mario Vitale

Keith Logan

Keith Logan

8 years 7 months ago

I'm not at all comfortable

with the notion of fans. There are many poets here I admire and read avidly but I stop short of following, being content to read as they make new posts.

K

K William

8 years 4 months ago

Well, I can't read anymore.

Well, I can't read anymore. Thank you. I don't .know what goes wrong with the first stanza, it seems way out to me. Clunky is the word I would use. Perhaps a rewrite, I think ... 'In sweater and old jeans', maybe.

Keith Logan

Keith Logan

8 years 4 months ago

As I said

on another poem's comments, sorry if my writing style upsets you in any way.