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lovedly
lovedly
Nov 25, 2016 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

untitled till you say

soon the lights
will dim
clouds will
veil the stars
what then will the sun
do in the morning
to tear
the curtain apart

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

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Keith Logan

Keith Logan

8 years 7 months ago

This poem

has to be one of your best. It certainly demonstrates how good brevity can be.
Possible title: Daystar

Sparrow

Sparrow

8 years 7 months ago

Loved

This depicts a transition of many things young Bard and well written.
We leave this plain to journey on after learning of physical things.
I always believe that there is a place where the children play and beyond, so we will see another sun where the skies are always as we think them to be and oh so many think things that are beyond our memories.
I fear not to walk without legs and see without eyes and feel without touch, come have a cup of tea with me I shall always be there in think,
Yours Ian..
PS:- I did comment and you missed it !!

lovedly

lovedly

8 years 7 months ago

Thanks Ian

but you did not suggest a title
iron one

like AIR FORCE -1

Sparrow

Sparrow

8 years 7 months ago

Loved

My opening words are This depicts a "Transition" and is the same as what Alid suggested, cant stop have to go to hospital for my Bionic eye Du Du Du..
Yours Ian..

lovedly

lovedly

8 years 7 months ago

my dear joe

its a lovely day
seeing you
hope ur keeping
well too

alidzain

alidzain

8 years 7 months ago

loved

To me, this IS your BEST poem. Suggested title -Transition

Alid