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Jan 29, 2017
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Loosing Someone That's Still Alive
Their are many wonders
Things that keep your thoughts
from going forward.
When you see someone with a gift
that is unknown.
They don't feel that they have
what people want.
What a waist
Everone has a gift
They just need some space.
God, awesome as he is,
will give you what it takes.
Loosing someone that is still alive
They need to know that God
will give you grace
About This Poem
Last Few Words: What I see In people, some people never see. The need to have a purpose, Whatever it should be . Without a need for being they seem to get depressed. They turn to having real bad thoughts, Then even lose interest. So when you see this happen Take a moment from your day Tell them something positive Just see what they may say.
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weirdelf
8 years 5 months ago
The title "Loosing Someone That's Still Alive"
says Alzheimers to me.
If there is a god, he is a cunt.
"What a waist" [ think you meant waste.]
Depression is not a disease that can be helped by positive affirmations.