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Jun 19, 2017
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After Dark
When the only thing you can see is your breath from the cold,
My trembling hand I ask you will hold.
As your skin grazes, our love starts a spark,
I'll always miss you the day after dark.
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
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How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
8 years ago
Just lovely
I love compression of meaning