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Jun 29, 2017
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Scars (indirect imagery)
Red furrows plowed into the pale clay
Grow into mounds of silver stones.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
wesley snow
8 years ago
Again, I read very direct and clearly wrought imagery.
It's lovely. I am obviously missing the point of indirect imagery.
jane210660
7 years 12 months ago
Wesley this is how I see it
Take red furrows, that can bring several images to mind - are they red because the soil is red? Are they red because much blood has been spilt there in the past? Has a burial mound just been ploughed - again red referring to blood. Are they red because a red tractor ploughed them? - Ok, that one is a bit tenuous.
I think you are a bit like me and tend to over think things. I could be completely wrong, but if I really get under the expression' indirect imagery', I get into conflict with imagery per se. To some extent, all imagery is both direct and indirect in my book.
Stan will qualify this, but I wonder if covert/hidden imagery would be another way of thinking of it.
I am just reflecting out loud here, forgive me if I'm barking up the wrong tree.
Jx
jane210660
7 years 12 months ago
Sorry Rhiannon1010
I sort of hijacked your thread then.
I love the imagery in this, I can see several scenes, my favourite and not what you probably intended, is a burial mound being reconstructed after being ploughed up.
I also like the simple rural image of an old tractor, churning up all those stones and making a small mountain of them.
What was in your mind?
Jx
Rhiannon1010
7 years 12 months ago
Jane
When I wrote this, I was going to call it "scratches." I thought about cuts and scratches on the human body and how similar they are to the cuts and scratches in the earth made by agriculture.
Candlewitch
7 years 12 months ago
hello Rhiannon,
being an ex-cutter, the same images that you refer to, came to my mind. excellent work. fantastic imagery!
always, Cat
jane210660
7 years 12 months ago
Fab
I love that.
I was just too obtuse to see it.
Now you highlight it, it's obvious.
Jx
Rula
7 years 12 months ago
One of
the indirect imagery's job is to take the reader to different and many directions. These two lines have done this successfully. The author then has the freedom to explain his/her intention or not.
scribbler
7 years 12 months ago
OK
But what do the silver stones refer to?
Rhiannon1010
7 years 12 months ago
The silver stones
They are the ropes of hardened thick skin that form scars.
scribbler
7 years 12 months ago
OK
I have a 16 inch scar on my leg, 2- 1 inch scars on my chin and a bunch of other scares scattered about (dang! makes it sound like I'm some kind of mercenary or something lol) But all my scars are either pink or white. lol
Rhiannon1010
7 years 12 months ago
Interesting.
I have a scar on my neck from where I was impaled with a chair leg when I was three. It is white but has a silvery sheen to it in the light.
scribbler
7 years 12 months ago
Alright
Guess I don't spend enough time looking at my leg in direct light. Too busy looking at pretty legs I guess lmao...........stan
wesley snow
7 years 11 months ago
Mine is right down the middle of my chest and swollen and pink.
Quadruple bypass will do that for you. It's a big one. I also have three scars like holes where the tubes came out.