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Aug 01, 2017
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Resting
i started resting
i began to fail
am use to speed
why am i slow now
i rather masturbate myself to sleep and fuck my dreams
i hate snails for what they stand for
God is not teaching me patience.
About This Poem
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Comments
Barbara Writes
8 years 2 months ago
Hi
Interesting poetic theme
Tho your poem is simplistic in form and rhythm however descriptive image of resting is vague and subtle beneath your attitude of up with a God not answering your prayer. Keep writing and expressing your poetry
obidi ojochide
8 years 2 months ago
thank you for the review
thank you for the review babara, looking forward to hear or rather read more reviews from you.
Barbara Writes
8 years 2 months ago
Hi
You're welcome
I'm looking forward to reading more from you
lovedly
8 years 2 months ago
music|photography|pharmacist|Leo|single|music|photography|pharma
music = lyrical
photography =love of nature
pharmy =treatment when needed
LEO =SEXY you openly have above stated.... msbt/fck
single =wrong place for invitation
flash fictions we can see
hopefully all will welcome thee
I keep my fingers crossed
reading ur first master's piece
goods of luck poet
to thee
soonly you will read me
as that is a requirement of this site only
obidi ojochide
8 years 2 months ago
thank u so much lovedly, that
thank u so much lovedly, that just a summary of who i am... thank u for creating time to acess my work... God bless u real good