Which would you Choose?

Voices walking 2 beside
No eyes or ears for another
Mockingbirds echo a sing-song tune
All the same, to a worried lover

Moments flee with the time machine
Still they speak to only others
Write it down I beg of thee
How else might I speak, thy brother?

And if those ears shed their deaf
Voices walking 2 beside
Would they be the same Damn words
Or just a sound from deep inside?

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allen Poe, Henry Rollins, Langston Hughes, Emily Dickinson

Comments

brittle light

7 years 10 months ago

interesting,

interesting,
the natural voice vs the poetic voice
or the cultured voice vs raw, real voice
or the sane man's voice vs the insane one
or just one ordinary voice with a lot of mental machinations going on in the background?

I don't know, I pick #4

cool, unless I missed the gist.

eightmenout

7 years ago

Thanks

Thanks for stopping by, Al. It's been a while since I've logged on. Not writing these days. But I do appreciate the visit.

As for the poem, you definitely get the gist. But it's more of a mash between 1 and 3.

Thanks,

raj

7 years ago

Hi Scott

Good to see you write again. This one certainly gives a kick to the grey cells. Having read Al's comment and your response makes more sense.
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