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Aug 15, 2017
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Death
My heart breaks through the outer walls of my body and shatters, in my hands.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Experimenting with writing one-line poems
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Eumolpus
7 years 11 months ago
hi poetess
what a wonderful minimalism. I think it's great that you are getting so much meaning and physical energy in so few words.
Soon you will be putting these types of lines together and making very intense and passionate works. This I'm looking forward to indeed!