The Famous For Being Famous Syndrome

with your usual extra take.
Always enjoy reading your work Al.
Jx

Ha. You scene stealer, you!

Enjoyed.

portrait of certain personages. The ones that always know the best way to do anything. When they screw up, it's always because of someone or something beyond their control. Or because someone deliberately sabotaged them. Nice job Al, I especially liked the last two lines. ~ Gee.
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I like the imagery, the colorful word choice, and that in such a concise poem you manage to express so much. There seems to be a rhyme scheme, but it is broken randomly, which evokes a sense of chaos and instability - this goes right in line with the poem, so major kudos if you did that deliberately; even if it was accidental, that could be your talent acting subconsciously - either way, it's good. However, a few things threw me off a little bit as a reader. Speaking of rhymes, I'd avoid segments like "cotton ball walls" because you have two words rhyme within the line, and that tends to be a little messy. Such rhymes are normally saved for comic poetry, where throwing the reader off is part of the poem. I'd also urge you to adopt some manner of metric organization (iambic pentameter, etc.). The reason for this is that, with a set and somewhat strict scheme, you could actually create more chaos and discord by subverting the scheme (adding an additional iamb, inverting iambs, messing with the flow in all manner of ways). This would contrast with the normal strictness of metrical schemes and further amplify the discordant sense your poem seems to be about. Otherwise it is quire good, keep up the great work!