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AS SUMMER FADES
An acorn hits my metal roof
rolls to the eave, drops to the ground.
These loud impacts reveal the truth
that autumn soon will be around
as summer slowly loses sway.
And deer antlers have lost velvet
allowing them to thrash small trees
although the rut is not here yet.
Fall is heartless in its tease
as shadows lengthen day by day.
Golden rod and ragweed bloom
adding their scent and allergies.
They also foretell summer's doom
with each cough and sudden sneeze.
Migrating flocks will soon come this way.
I recall over three score years
of summers giving way to fall.
Some memories come with silent tears
for those who've answered their last call.
Though they are gone their memories stay.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ja Ja
7 years 9 months ago
AS SUMMER FADES
Thoughts of summers sad demise
As autumn brings forth, dormant cries
Natures changes well depicted
With future events to be inflicted
Thank you kindly
scribbler
7 years 9 months ago
Greetings
I appreciate your dropping by for a read........stan
lovedly
7 years 9 months ago
hi
but ur sponsor also
scribbler
7 years 9 months ago
DANG!
Me and stupid typos refuse to be parted lol. Good thing there are other eagle eyes around to spot the typos I miss........stan
scribbler
7 years 9 months ago
Yep
And as such I am not eligible to win but can post just for fun
lovedly
7 years 9 months ago
great
but what if the judge picks urs
I suppose they would not know
who composed what
scribbler
7 years 9 months ago
I have
stated many times on stream and in comments that since I'm the contest director that I'm not eligible to win. Each monthly judge is also informed of this when they are chosen. So my entries are just for fun......stan
lovedly
7 years 9 months ago
u mUst do..... LOLOLOLOLOLXXXXxxxxxxxx times
my bald head has holes
not as in a sponge
but hollow pipes
LARGE DRAIN
GARBAGE ONES
RFLOL ONNNNNNNNNNNNNN
Chiori
7 years 9 months ago
AS SUMMERFADES
nice one
well constructed
scribbler
7 years 9 months ago
Hello again lol
I am pleased you like this........stan
Seren
7 years 9 months ago
Hey Bro
Where do I start. This is a gorgeous poem I love it !! and yes Jess I said your dreaded L word lol. Really good to read you again. Still getting my bearings again be prepared for a more thorough critique next time xxx
Love Sis xxxx
scribbler
7 years 9 months ago
Hi Jayne!
It is great to see you pop up on my screen again. And you can say whatever you want, Jess can just grit his teeth lol. I hope your return is a sign that you are getting better............stan
lovedly
7 years 9 months ago
welcome back
have been missing your comments and works
hope ur better now