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Nov 12, 2017
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FEELING YOU
I look up at the stars, so high and see
Without a doubt, you’re looking back at me
Tears, like shooting stars, stream down my cheek
My neck so steeply stretched, I suddenly feel weak
I bow my head, drop to my knees in prayer
Thank the stars, you’re watching, from up there
I feel your hand, touch my heart, relieve my pain
As I taste you’re loving lips, kissing me again
In time I know, these feelings too, may disappear
But, I only wish, that I could be, with you my dear
BOEMS by JA 692
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Comments
scribbler
7 years 8 months ago
Hi Ja Ja
I like the thought of a loved one still looking on after death from the starry sky. Only thing I's suggest is breaking this into either 2 or 4 line stanzas.........stan
Chiori
7 years 8 months ago
nice one
the poem is touching and full of sympathy
Eumolpus
7 years 8 months ago
from the heart
I'm sure there are millions of us out there who have somebody "up there" we miss. LIfe has so much sorrow, but losing a loved one is top of the list.