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Feb 13, 2011
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Kite
Up in the heavens
Over this mortal plane...
Watch me glide with hovered wings.
I can feel the winds rush
Around this surreal fin
Of satin paper, wooden frame;
Lifting up my hollow skin.
Be my navigator.
The tides of the air restrict me.
Take my hand through the skies...
I can only fly by your gentle love strings.
About This Poem
Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Dennis Go
14 years 4 months ago
Hi JayCee
I guess you've read it before I may have posted this on the old neo site. Just a little piece for the Valentines atmosphere. :)
Dennis Go
14 years 4 months ago
Hi Amal
Thanks for the advice I'll give it a thought. Changes in syllable counts tend to alter the whole piece's emotion and delivery. Thanks again :)