Turmoil

A school
of fish swam
in uniforms

Got caught
in torrent
of torment

Their ocean
in turmoil
turned bloody red

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

7 years 4 months ago

Scary tale!
I think it is one of your best

7 years 4 months ago

Thanks for the time, visit and comment Friend. Means a lot

Scare is the right word, which I could sense in their stare...

Regards

7 years 4 months ago

at me all stare
what the hell
can a poet like me spell