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R
raj

Illusion [Sunku]

Trudging
through sand storm
with parched lips

Listless
eyes no more
trust a mirage

Only
goosebumps hint
an Oasis

About This Poem

Last Few Words: An attempt to express more through fewer words in Sunku Form.the emerging new form of poetry which I am actively promoting through my efforts however little they may be

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Comments

fink555

fink555

7 years 3 months ago

Excellent

This is a dream transcription? Has an ethereal, uncomplicated air.

R

raj

7 years 3 months ago

Thank you for the read

Thank you for the read and appreciative comment....
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