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Mar 17, 2018
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Illusion [Sunku]
Trudging
through sand storm
with parched lips
Listless
eyes no more
trust a mirage
Only
goosebumps hint
an Oasis
About This Poem
Last Few Words: An attempt to express more through fewer words in Sunku Form.the emerging new form of poetry which I am actively promoting through my efforts however little they may be
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
IRiz
7 years 3 months ago
Scary dream, my friend!
Scary dream, my friend!
raj
7 years 3 months ago
Thanks IRiz for the read and
Thanks IRiz for the read and comment
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fink555
7 years 3 months ago
Excellent
This is a dream transcription? Has an ethereal, uncomplicated air.
raj
7 years 3 months ago
Thank you for the read
Thank you for the read and appreciative comment....
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