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aeron maccloud
aeron maccloud
Apr 12, 2018 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Not a groupy

Musicians have great arms,
with tats,
skinny legs and great cheekbones.
Their eyes are deep,
and say come to bed with me.

Shmucks!
Think I’m gonna fall for that again?
Let them play their stringed phalluses,

I’m gonna write a bitter poem,
full of the joy of liberation.

And some regret,
singers know how to use their tongues.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I am a muso in my own right, so definitely not a groupy.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: 2pac, Hecate (Aussie female punk band), Bukowskie, The Romantics, Shakespeare

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Comments

Obadiah Grey

Obadiah Grey

7 years 2 months ago

So, You've fell for it once

So, You've fell for it once before then? hee hee.

Thanks for writing an interesting piece that only has a little of "yourself" in it.

Obi.

weirdelf

weirdelf

7 years 2 months ago

Only a little?

Between the title, the first verse, and the last I thought 'the lady doth protest too much' might come across and it reveal a bit more of her.

Geezer

Geezer

7 years 2 months ago

No...

I don't think have, and I'm not. I am a dedicated horror fan though. I love your profile picture. As a youth and in my younger years, Vincent Price was my favorite orator and actor, with Boris Karloff as a close second.
Brilliant orators who influenced my poetry and story -telling. I love to twist the words of the English language, and strike double meanings. Just to make sure that I knew what I was talking about, I went and looked Muso up. So again, no. I hope that you continue to post good work here and you can be sure that I will comment and critique. ~ Geezer.
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aeron maccloud

aeron maccloud

7 years 2 months ago

Thank you Geezer

I'm a huge horror fan too. Wait till I post some of my more disturbing works!
Though I'm a bit concerned about who might read them, kids younger than 13 probably shouldn't.
What are the age restrictions on Neopoet and how carefully are they checked?

IRiz

IRiz

7 years 1 month ago

Bitter, rebellious and yet

Bitter, rebellious and yet hopeful poem.
The line four has repeated are.

I like that smirk at the end.
But I think the double meaning of the last line is a little too obvious.

aeron maccloud

aeron maccloud

7 years 1 month ago

Thanks for pointing out

the repeated are, fixed.
Is there a double meaning in the last line?
Yes I guess so, but it's meant to be obvious.
Good cunnilingus is hard to come by.
Haven't you found it so?
Only other grrls really know.
Thank you for your help Iriz.

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scribbler

7 years 1 month ago

limits?

Well for a few that I'm aware of.......No poetry which encourages sex with minors. No belittling religions.No direct threats to others. Try to handle sex in an erotic as opposed to pornographic manner.......As far as I know off hand that's about it. But Do keep in mind there are minors on sight and don't post stuff you'd not want your child or nieces to read.........stan

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scribbler

7 years 1 month ago

As far

as I'm aware there is no minimum age restriction on joining but I think there are few if any pre teens on site.

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raj

7 years 1 month ago

Hi Aeron

your signature is pretty straight forward "If poetry doesn't change anything it isn't anything."...so i would look forward to read your poems conforming to it...
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raj

7 years 1 month ago

Hi Aeron

I didn't say that your poetry doesn't challenge anything...what I meant was do not hesitate to post stuff if that's going to bring about a change...hope that clarifies my comment.
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Geezer

Geezer

7 years 1 month ago

Maybe you should...

read some of my "Killer" stuff to get an idea of what you can post here. Sometimes Killer is somewhat graphic. I don't believe that I have ever posted anything really pornographic and really haven't seen the limits tested in that respect. I think that you might put a warning near the title that it is sexual in nature and try not to be too....?

I think That Unholy Shit! [One of my Killer poems] is a pretty good example of a Killer graphic poem and maybe Ahhhhhh from the Horror Workshop will show you how I alluded to something of a sexual perversion. Good luck in your efforts here. ~ Geezer.
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scribbler

7 years 1 month ago

DAMN!

You mean writing poetry won't turn me into a sex symbol? Then why write at all? LMAO.....stan