Rula

May 17, 2018 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Message From The Moon

while

everyone

on earth

was burning,

and yearning

for a mundane affair,

a crescent was born

it peaked above us all

with a spiritual call

asking

everyone

to heal

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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Comments

raj

7 years 2 months ago

Dear friend Rula

one more example of your innovation and creativity. I liked both the form and substance of the verses creating a crescent smile of the moon.

Well done artist Rula...
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Rula

7 years 2 months ago

Hello Raj

I thought of this as the newly born crescent of this month brought the holy month of Ramadan which brings so many blessings for the Muslims who fast this month. Saying that, I preferred to keep it general as each moon is so special and always holds an aloof message while shining through the darkness.
Thanks for your supportive kind words friend.

raj

7 years 2 months ago

a good way to express a holy

a good way to express a holy sentiment.

on a lighter note I would tell you not to fast on poems....:)
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Rula

7 years 2 months ago

Thank you raj

I'll try not to :)
Thank you again.

Rula

7 years 2 months ago

Thank you Mark

It does take a lot of time especially that it's the first shape poetry for me,however, I thought it's worth it to express the mood of such a month.

tyro

7 years 2 months ago

Dear Rula, Ramadan Kareem

a very encouraging message, and a very meaningful shape poem.

Rula

7 years 2 months ago

Thank you

kindest friend.
Highly appreciate your passing by and the wishes.

OriginalRhyku

7 years 2 months ago

Rula

artistic, surrealistic and universalistic. Well designed and well expressed.

Rula

7 years 2 months ago

Hello O.Rhyku

and lots of thanks for reading and commenting.

Eumolpus

7 years 2 months ago

nice concrete poem!

I never understood why a poem in a shape is called that...

I have troubles doing anything like this on the site- indentions, italics...how were you able to paste this up? I cannot find the means in the formatting section.

raj

7 years 2 months ago

I think she has done this

I think she may have done this using space bar...just a wild guess
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Rula

7 years 2 months ago

Hello Mark

I'm trying to find you a very rich blog by Kelsey (swamp witch) on how to do it. It needs more than just one step.

Rula

7 years 2 months ago

Just found

this link should help
Please don't hesitate to ask if you need any further help

https://www.neopoet.com/swamp-witch/blog/sat-2014-03-22-2100

lovedly

7 years 2 months ago

Rula

you always beat me
so I only admire thee

some time ago
I also composed
a crescently poetry
but it always lined up
along the side lines of neo's
and let the crescent go

now I also know
how about it to go

Rula

7 years 2 months ago

Thank you

Loved. I'm happy to know that you like it.

lovedly

7 years 2 months ago

and

I always bow to Ladies Rula
and ur
one

gregwa8

7 years 2 months ago

wonderful!

Rula

7 years 2 months ago

Greg

Thank you

scribbler

7 years 2 months ago

Hi Rula

Posting form poetry can be a real challenge. I know this is supposed to be a crescent as well as what the shape stands for. That all being said it would come across better if the shape was a bit smoother.......stan

Rula

7 years 2 months ago

Hello Stan

I of course understand your point. I tried my best for a smoother shape, but the site advanced formatting wouldn't help much to show shapes. I however have done some minor edits as recommended by you and wonder if the shape now looks any better.
Always appreciate your time and thoughts.
Be well.