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Jun 01, 2018
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The Ultimate Prayer
I penned it down
Let it be read every where
I adore thee
Please let me be taken-
To a place of safety.
Let me be among the first fruit;
Let me not be left out.
I don’t want to be a residue.
I want to escape the fire that is coming.
My only goal…
Help me save my soul.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I'm not party to this, the muse should explain better. It came and i drop the thought down.
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
tyro
7 years ago
It sounds you are envisioning
It sounds you are envisioning heaven , with the soul as connection for getting you there.
I like it for all its metaphorical qualities.
What the muse sends through you, takes on part of you, when translated to your voice.
nice poem
Mallory
7 years ago
You sort me right
You nailed it! It seems you perceived me when the thought was descending through.
Thanks for the read and full understanding of the poem.