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Ice Dream

I scream
You scream
We all scream

It is like something out of
Charlie and the Chocolate Factory

The dark side
Of sweets

The ice cream man
In a vampire costume

Daiquiris and diabetes

Children trampling each other
For Choco Tacos

Suburban whispering
“What’s the scoop?”
“Did you hear about the split?”

Can there be too much
Of a good thing?
Your tongue turning
Permanent colors?
Maybe, a killer brain freeze?

Do ice cream truck jingles
Ever warp
In your nightmares, too?

— gregwa8, Jun 11, 2018

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Rough draft

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Region, Country: Maryland, USA

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fink555

fink555

8 years ago

Has

a macabre flavor to it, wow. Reminds me of the film "Phantasm".

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