Buzzing Ambrosian Decrees

What a treat from the bees
Something golden to please

They’re like a board of trustees
Taking flowers as their fees

Each a lil’ Hercules
Flying miles in the breeze

The fields their diocese
Buzzing ambrosian decrees

Even ol’ Socrates
Who said that being busy

Is just a wasting disease
Without some expertise

Would say the bees’ guarantees
Are nothing at which to sneeze

They say the moon’s made of cheese
And broccoli’s just little trees

But tastier than both of these
By a great many degrees

Is the gift of honeys —
Tip of the tongue analyses

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Maryland, USA

Comments

raj

6 years 11 months ago

Hi Greg

pretty tough to maintain aaaaaaaaaa rhyme sequence through and through all verses...as tough as the work honeybees do...
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chevyvent

6 years 11 months ago

The theme is overwhelming

The theme is overwhelming I think this piece is top notch you did a great job.
Through the arrangement of this piece you can bask in the arts with a good feel
Further, I like the second stanza very good in its form you wrote a materpiece
I'm encouraged to read more of your writings. Lastly, the ending takes you in let's you be a friend.

Geezer

6 years 11 months ago

Congratulations...

on making it all the way through a very tough form! Seems like you have a thing for honey. That's as good as Honey having a thing for you! ~ Geezer.
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Rula

6 years 11 months ago

An inspiring read

is the least to say

tyro

6 years 11 months ago

This was not easy to achieve,

This was not easy to achieve, so bravo on your poetic sensibilities..