AUGUST CONTEST

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Why Did I Love You?

like two fish
taken from different parts
of the sea
and put in the same
pet shop aquarium
I liked your stripes
and your smile
you my spots
and my moves
so we swam
everywhere together
under the arch
by the seaweed trees
beneath a golden “sun”
until you were bought
for $10.50
the price of our
betrayal

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