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Sep 02, 2018
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weaver
silk wool sari thread
blind mares' mane
egret feather magpie song currawong
dazzled- close your eyes -
still weaving
ships' rope jute golden baling twine
mud damp reeds scented dried
warp and weft weft and warp
single ribbon snake skin slides
unanchored
by the loom
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Knocked this poem up following a conversation with a friend about lives - the weaving of others into our own internal framework
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Roscoe Lane
7 years 1 month ago
I like,
I like this a lot, and can picture what your saying with words. Regards Roscoe... A heartfelt welcome to Neopoet,,
IRiz
7 years 1 month ago
interesting poem, it is too
interesting poem, it is too cryptic to my taste
open up a little more
gregwa8
7 years 1 month ago
I enjoyed the rhythm and
I enjoyed the rhythm and imagery in this. nice!
Sparrow
7 years 1 month ago
Jaspa
Just to read once, then again to fill in the in between the lines.
As if you are being lazy, but the picture was good, could be the weaver of life you are talking about but we still have to fill in the bits..
Welcome back to Neopoet, Stay with us a while I want to read your filling in poem.. Yours Ian .