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Yes that night 'twas ( Edit courtesy Eumol)

In the middle of the night
there was some noise
though very slight
my hair stood
on end with utter fright
who it was
that was my plight.

all alone stark naked
as I lay aright
it was in the middle
of last night

singularly alone
I was all by myself
on the wild plateau
starkness clouded the sight

It was like being in the desert
then the window opened
I shouted with my entire might
but silence broke through
as there was no terrible fright
my dream was buried
in the middle of the eerie night

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

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Comments

Simon

Simon

6 years 9 months ago

Hi lovedly

It's a nice poem i must confence and i like the rhyming in the first stanza keep up.

lovedly

lovedly

6 years 9 months ago

THANKX FOR

confessing at times
I dig deep into my memoirs
old ones are good for sure

Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

6 years 9 months ago

The witching hour,

The witching hour, when the mind can play tricks on all of us. And you have captured it perfectly. Regards Roscoe...

Eumolpus

Eumolpus

6 years 9 months ago

you create a good mood

with just a few words we are in a horror movie, knowing that if we open the door a hatchet will follow immediately between our eyes! I think the third stanza breaks down a bit...here's a take

It was (staying modern) like being in the desert
then the window opened
I shouted with my entire might (spell check)
but silence broke through
(there was no delight does not work for me,
here we need a stronger line about the sound disappearing)
my dream was buried
in the middle of the eerie nite

I do not think we really need the last line about midnight. The intent of the poem is to convey that eerie feeling in this short video poem, in which the words do work great and you get the reader there right away.
..

Eumolpus

Eumolpus

6 years 9 months ago

thank you and quite welcome

for whatever suggestions that resonate. We all help each other and the commenting process is a learning process each time we post one. So I thank you too for the challenging offerings.

lovedly

lovedly

6 years 9 months ago

I always honour the worthy

and
know they shall help me
in my next poetry
but sorry one too many
Eumol

but help will ye
this natural poet in me